Stop, Start, Continue: Speech One

Start: - Being better prepared for my speech.  This will allow me to dictate the flow and pace of my future speeches.  I had the dialogue memorized, or so I thought.  Once I went up to present my speech I froze up, and started to doubt myself.  This forced me to depend on my notecard during certain points in my speech, which was detrimental to the fluidity of my overall presentation.  Due to lacking 100% control of my script some of my main points didn't come out as persuasive as intended. In my original dialogue I had planned on saying, "Just think of all the current events happening that you can make fun of like Donald Trump's candidacy, the debacle that is police cruelty, Hilary Clinton." I had planned on this being a funny part of my speech by simply saying Clintons name and nothing else at the end.  During the practice speech this was a part of my speech that had drawn laughter, but I screwed it up.  I noticed while watching the video that it was a slippery slope for me when I slipped up on my script. If I messed up a line I had trouble recovering and just pushing through.  I need to start just taking a deep breath and calm down. Not having my speech fully memorized made me lose command of my tone.  I almost sounded timid, which made my speech lose some of its luster.  My speech didn't come across as passionate because I didn't have a full grasp of what I was saying. This starts by finding a better technique for memorizing my speech, as well as more practice.
-I need to go over the rubric before making my speech so I fully comprehend what is expected.  A part of my speech that I would have done differently is adding more contextual backdrop to my speech, which was clearly stated in the rubric.  This would have provided more of a plot line, and would have made my speech come across as more realistic.  By not doing this I didn't capture my audiences attention.  Also, my speech lacked opposing perspectives and didn't have a specific follow-up plan of action.  This was a simple element to the speech that I missed.
-Practicing in front of the mirror.  By doing this I'll be able to practice proper execution of using hand gestures.  Adding hand motions will bring emphasis to points.  It also is engaging to the audience so they pay attention more.
Continue: - Practicing in front of my roommates.  This allowed me see what it was like to present in front of a real-life audience, which is hard to replicate.  It revealed what was funny about my speech, showed if my sentences lacked structure, and if I articulated my points well.  Their feedback was also a positive.   I was able to change some sentences in my speech because I noticed they sounded weird when I said it to a real audience.
- Using quotes in my speech.  I tried to sway my audience by using the quote, "You can become famous but you can't become unfamous. You can become infamous but not unfamous." This showed I valued what Dave Chapelle said as a person, while allowing me to have a smoother transition to the ending of my speech.  In future speeches, I will continue to use quotes that enriches my rhetoric as I persuade my audience. Providing quotes from a first hand source gives you credibility with your audience and helps maintain your ethos.
-I felt like I made really good eye contact with my audience.  After watching the video of my speech I didn't maintain eye contact as much as I originally had thought, but it wasn't terrible.  In future speeches I will continue to build on this.  Eye contact is paramount in making your audience feel like they are a participant in your presentation.
Stop:  - Not having as good of body posture as I could have.  This effected my professionalism, which was part of the speech by adding context.  It was harder to use hand gestures when I lacked proper posture too.  This stems from me feeling awkward standing up in front of the class.  Before I presented I wanted to grab the podium because it offered a barrier between me and the audience. I need more practice to become comfortable while presenting.  This will make it easier to remember my speech, add hand gestures, and makes my audience feel more involved.
- Not fluctuating the tone of my voice to help with transitions, making points, and to capture my audiences attention better.  While watching my peers perform their speeches I noticed how some would raise or lower the pitch of their voice. This is something that I will use in our next assignment because it gains the audience's attention well
- I need to eradicate the monotone out of my voice in future speeches.  This just makes my speech sound boring to my audience. It also made it appear like I liked the passion for convincing Chapelle of returning into the public spotlight. When in reality I would do anything for him to say "fuck that couch", and to start making hilarious Youtube videos that would be unedited.
-Pausing will help transitioning from different segments of my speech. The ability to pause is something that is a uniform quality in all effective public speakers.  I need to stop not using them in future speeches.  Doing this will add emphasis to key points that I am trying to make.
    Ultimately, to persuade my audience I need to be in complete control of the language for my speech. This involves far far more practice time in preparation for my speech.  I need to understand everything the rubric is asking of me as I write the dialogue for the speech.  Overall my performance wasn't bad, but wasn't as good as it could have been. I made mistakes that affected the clarity of what I was trying to convince my audience of. In preparation for future speeches I will use new techniques to help memorize my speech giving me control of my speaking.

Darth Elevador script

Rhetorical Situation: I'm stuck in an elevator with Dave Chapelle at the Laugh Factory in LA, and my goal is to convince him of returning back into the public spotlight.

Hey Dave, my name is Kyle Ignatius.  I have been an avid fan for sometime of your comedy.  Your absence from Comedy Central has left a void in my life.  No longer can I laugh at your obscene humor, such as your True Hollywood skits with Charlie Murphy and Rick James.  I respect that you took a stand against the corporate mongrels at Comedy Central, but America needs you back.  I know you have an upcoming HBO special, which will show some stand up comedy, but we are in dire of more.  Just think of all the current events happening that you can make fun of like Donald Trump's candidacy, the debacle that is police cruelty, Hillary Clinton.   Since your departure from the public spotlight the world has seen numerous new avenues arise for entertainment, such as Youtube.  Why don't you make your own Youtube channel.  The cost would be cheap, the content is entirely up to you, and the advertisement money you can make is insane.  Felix Kjellburg is some random guy who literally just makes ludicrous comments while watching people play video games,  he made 7.4$ million dollars last year and has 37 million followers. A women who opens new Disney toys under the alias DisneycollectorBR "earned" 20 million dollars last year, and she doesn't even show her face.   Imagine what you could do with your already cult-like following.  You can air one skit a week, and I promise you that you will have millions of people watching you.  At your most current show at Pabst Theater in Milwaukee you received raving reviews saying that you were in "peak form" you obviously still got it Recently, you partnered with Yondr, which is a company that locks your cell phone to use at your shows to stop leaked content.  Take back control of your jokes by creating this medium for your fans.  Bring your humor and wit back into the lives of the millions of Americans who crave for your return, like Tyronn Biggums craves Crack.  You may not miss the world, but we miss you Dave.  You once said "You can become famous but you can't become unfamous. You can become infamous but not unfamous" This is your chance Dave to become infamous and to permanently etch your name in humor lore by changing the landscape of the humor business. 

  I was born in Baltimore, Maryland then moved to Minnesota when I was 6 years old.  At first I went to school at the University of Kansas but due to some poor decision-making transferred to SBCC.  I am majoring in Communication and plan on transferring to UCSB next fall.  Also,  I work at the restaurant Sambos.  In my free time I enjoy playing sports, reading, and music.